(I refuse to make it fair even as my frnd adi forces me. i did punctuate it!!! im too lazy. i dedicate it to vishal, an imp reason of my spoilt stupidity. and ofc pa. most imp i dedicate it to me. to fear and courage. and to never growing up... lol... cheers... read on and comment.)
A firm hand moves over my curvy waist,teeth mark my neck,
And lips caress my jaw line.As i am posseisively held,
"Trust me", the voice says. "I love the you of you".
I blush and I let out a sigh!
I hear, screams and insults,
My hurt kills my voice, I cannot be heard.
I see red. The red of rage.
I see greenish blue. The colour of my wound.
A small hand tugs my dress,
She waves out to me and runs to 'daddy',
The child inside me envies her,
As she walks along playfully with her hero!
My breath is fast and short,
My tears are flooding.
My body is red in fear,
And my hands shake as I hold tht bottle of water.
Now I'm breathing, eyes low, and everything is slow.
The pills are spreading its wings inside.
I spread out my hand trying to grab some support,
And theres is soft light outside my eyelids.
Honey, dodi, pumpkin, baby, duh, girl, princess.
They try all names to wake me up.
This tube in my nose is irritating,
And so is that concerned face waiting outside.
Dont ask me why? Ask him. Why did u wake me up?
Let me sleep, oh, let me sleep, please let me lie down!
My breath is working, your work here is done.
Life came to me. Moments became memories. Life left.
A firm hand moves over my curvy waist,teeth mark my neck,
And lips caress my jaw line.As i am posseisively held,
"Trust me", the voice says. "I love the you of you".
I blush and I let out a sigh!
I hear, screams and insults,
My hurt kills my voice, I cannot be heard.
I see red. The red of rage.
I see greenish blue. The colour of my wound.
A small hand tugs my dress,
She waves out to me and runs to 'daddy',
The child inside me envies her,
As she walks along playfully with her hero!
My breath is fast and short,
My tears are flooding.
My body is red in fear,
And my hands shake as I hold tht bottle of water.
Now I'm breathing, eyes low, and everything is slow.
The pills are spreading its wings inside.
I spread out my hand trying to grab some support,
And theres is soft light outside my eyelids.
Honey, dodi, pumpkin, baby, duh, girl, princess.
They try all names to wake me up.
This tube in my nose is irritating,
And so is that concerned face waiting outside.
Dont ask me why? Ask him. Why did u wake me up?
Let me sleep, oh, let me sleep, please let me lie down!
My breath is working, your work here is done.
Life came to me. Moments became memories. Life left.
5 comments:
Awesome..!! Really well-written.
The writing is good, but more importantly, the imagination is extreamly vivid. The surreal content, seems very real and very feelable.
Whilst, reading, i could feel what the writer's character muz have felt, sense what the writer's character must have sensed...
Reading it.. is truely AN EXPERIENCE.
Unfortunately, i dont hv the good-fortune of being ignorant enough to enjoy the work completely... to smile and applaude with all my heart.. or to say KEEP IT UP.
Nice to see you punctuating it, Praxi. And as i have already said in g-talk, i liked the raw courage of the poem. Nothing much to say besides that. A good creation after a long time, ..so to speak.. i liked this poem of yours more than i liked the ones before.
Keep it up.
@Vishal : nice comment, and well said.
Extra-s: Okie now hurry and post something there. If you feel like doing so. In that novel-blog. i have recently posted a post. go through it, ..and see if you can get anything out of your closet. [:)]
we will discuss the theme the next time we meet at g-talk, ..hopefully by next week, ..cheers.
wow, well written
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